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What The **** Is Wrong With Me

Discussion in 'The Lounge' started by Resurrection_Joe, Sep 18, 2006.

  1. Resurrection_Joe

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    Yeah, I know, a lot

    What I mean, and I know, bitterly, few of you care about, is...

    ...why the **** do I only really want to write when I'm just about to sleep?

    I wanted to clock out at 4:00. I just daydreamed about the mythos for an hour and then got up to write.

    I suppose, lackluster as it is, this is the announcment. It's started.

    It's very momentous, as a few of you will know. It's been a long conception.

    My toes are numb.

    Here, a few paragraphs of into for you. I hope you can go buy them some day, as a start to something much more.

    There was darkness. Then, there was light. A man sitting in a dully black sedan opened his eyes. He wasn’t really waking up, for he hadn’t been sleeping, but he had been dreaming. He pushed him self into a proper sitting posture from the sprawled position he had gradually slumped into over the night. Frugally, it acted as his morning stretch as well.
    He looked to the right first, reassuring himself that the small tavern that existed last night still did. He turned to the left, ducking his head to avoid the direct glare of the ever brightening sun in the windshield glass, and regarded the street. Still there, still black, still dusted with gravel and cigarette butts. An unconscious association lit in his head, and he, in reaction, lit a cigarette, drawn from a crumpled pack on the dash. They were unfiltered, old school and didn’t leave behind anything. They were a crude metaphor of the man.

    Wooooooo

    I'm writing in Surpip in this chapter. Ahhh, nepotism.
     
  2. Resurrection_Joe

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    That reminds me, I'm going to need a few editors/critic for the first chapter. I want to make sure I start out vaugely interesting.

    If you're literate and have a bit of time, let me know.
     
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    ill help
    last line should be: didden't leave anyhting behind, flows better
     
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    When you approach the sleep threshold your concious logical mind relaxes and your creative unconcious takes over.
     
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    I'm going to go look up, Frugally.......








    [Latin fr[​IMG]g[​IMG]lis, virtuous, thrifty, from fr[​IMG]x, fr[​IMG]g-, fruit, virtue.]



    So,...according to this..."Fruitally, it acted as his morning stretch as well."


    Is this guy confussed about his preferences and thats why he's sleeping in the car or something?
     
  6. Resurrection_Joe

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    Good call Pip
     
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    Just bustin' chops...

    But what j.cricket said is true, happens to me at night with a song from earlier or a guitar riff I was working on...those couple brain cells just keep playing over and over...

    I think your beginning surpasses "vaguely interesting", it sets pretty good actually. Gives me a creepy kind of "Sin City" or "Kalifornia" feeling…like this guy might be up to no good in the future.
     
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    thanks buddy
    i read a metric asston of book, so id be glead to help, i am usually pretty good at catching stuff
    even though i cant speell worth a ****
     
  9. Resurrection_Joe

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    Thank you

    The man is acutally Resurrection Joe

    That's interesting about the creative bit......
     
  10. mosesburb

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    Cool, RJ's writing again!!
    I'd be glad to read/proof your work. I do feel I must warn you that I did have a Communist Nazi Psycho English Professor that wrongfully accused me of having somebody do my work for me. She is probably dead now though.
     
  11. Resurrection_Joe

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    Hrmm, cool.

    If I have proofreaders, I'll probably assign a chapter per individual, to prevent anyone knowing the whole mythos.

    Thanks
     

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